IELTS essay, topic: Children should be engaged in paid work, agree or disagree?
In many countries
children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard
this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work
experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is
your opinion?
The issue of
whether or not children should be engaged in some paid work has sparked a
heated debate. While some argue that having some employment experience
is conducive to a child’s learning and development, I contend that it
would bring harm to the child’s heath and learning.
First of all, a
workplace designed for adults is normally shortage of child-friendly
facilities. Desks and chairs are too high for a child; the light
switches are installed on the walls unreachable by children; also
emergency training and facilities such as phones are only provided to
adults. Furthermore, various hazards such as polluted air and chemical
fumes are still produced in factories and farms. Undoubtedly young
people would suffer in such workplaces.
Also, children
would find it frustrating when they are not properly inducted before
starting a job. A child working in a cement factory would feel a setback
when he could not get immediate support while struggling with the
procedures of recording different raw materials that is required by the
job. Further, without sufficient support, a child’s misunderstanding or
inappropriately communicating with adults would only disappoint him and
prevents him from active learning and interacting with other people.
To conclude, a
child’s paid employment experience would lead to a negative impact on
their health and active learning. However, recognizing the importance of
children’s learning and their awareness of responsibility, it is
advisable to encourage them to be involved in some volunteering
opportunities where they can meaningfully learn and interact with other
people with sufficient care and support in place for such jobs.
This is a good
essay. There are only a few errors (mouse over the words underlined in
blue shows corrections), but otherwise this work seems worthy of Band
7.5 or 8. Remember to always proofread your essay before submitting it.
Keep up the good work!
